The Space Turtle » story telling http://www.thespaceturtle.com Entertaining Fiction, and turtles. Wed, 01 Feb 2012 17:24:03 +0000 en hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 First story of the year almost completed http://www.thespaceturtle.com/first-story-of-the-year-almost-completed/ http://www.thespaceturtle.com/first-story-of-the-year-almost-completed/#comments Mon, 25 Jan 2010 04:15:47 +0000 Chivalrybean http://www.thespaceturtle.com/?p=266 I went through one of my short story called Send In today and changed a bit of the prose. I wrote it originally in Google Docs, but moved it over to yWriter. Once there I ran some of the ‘problem words’ searches and found I had a lot of works that ended with ‘ly’. I wasn’t sure what this meant so I asked Matt Selznick on gTalk about it and he said I was probably taking shortcuts of descriptions. To clarify I asked if ‘The car quickly sped up’ versus ‘The engine revved as the car sped up’ is what he meant. That was exactly what he meant so I went through and changed most of the ‘ly’ instances to have more detail.

I did a few other changes, the program suggested and aside from just better description, one part of the story near the end has a much stronger narrative now, plus a hilarious joke.

All that is left is correcting typos and making sure I stayed in the proper tense, then I think it will be good to go. It will be over 3300 words.

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